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My brother, script writer Doug Eboch (author of The Three Stages of
Screenwriting and The
Hollywood Pitching Bible), had a blog post
titled Not
According to Plan. In it he states, “Over the last month I’ve read several
scripts that suffered from lethargy and/or a feeling they were too episodic.
The underlying cause was that the main characters were failing to make plans.
They were reactive to events rather than driving the story. Giving the
character plans keeps them active and gives the story forward momentum.”
In recent months, I’ve critiqued several manuscripts that
were generally very strong. However, they suffered from the same problem. Here
are couple of excerpts from the critiques (with some details hidden for
privacy).
What’s lacking, I think, is clarity in MC’s Goals/Motivation
and the Stakes.
Try to establish what MC wants up front, and keep reminding
us of that or let us know how her goals change. For example, as she’s entering
town, she may hope to find out more about her past. Once she knows about X, she
wants to do Y. All of this ties into a longer, deep-seated goal of finding her
place in the world. She may not be able to express that clearly, but we’ll see
it in her short-term goals….
Her goals and motivations are also tied into the stakes. It’s
important to have clear and high stakes – why her goals are important, and what
happens if she fails. For example, if she fails to convince her mother to stay,
she loses the chance to ever truly find a home with family who love and accept
her.
She could even have
both fears and hopes, sometimes seeing the positive and sometimes the negative.
But showing us why this is so important to her will expand your theme and
increase the stakes (what she has to gain or lose if she succeeds or fails).
And another:
One thing that may help you with your scenes is to think
about scene goals. In every scene, your characters should have specific goals.
These are likely immediate, short-term goals that lead to a larger story goal.
For example, MC and MC2 want to get X, so they can do X. Focus on that goal,
and the limited time they have, in each scene. If your main characters don’t
have a goal – if they are just watching Comic Relief’s antics – it doesn’t move
the story forward.
There’s an extra benefit to focusing on your character’s goals:
I think if you focus more on goals and stakes, you’ll also
naturally develop your plot some. At times MC seems too passive, simply hoping
things will or won’t happen and waiting for them. But if she has a strong,
clear goal, you’ll see ways to increase the tension. (I went into more detail
on this in my post on Happy Endings.)
And don’t forget –
We should also see MC actively pursuing her goals. If she
doesn’t want to leave, she shouldn’t just silently hope for that. She should be
trying to get what she wants.
For more on
cause/effect and clarifying goals, see the first couple of posts under the "pacing" label.
And please do see my brother’s full blog post, Not
According to Plan.
So, what’s your goal
now?
Chris Eboch is the author of over 50 books for children,
including nonfiction and fiction, early reader through teen. Her novels for
ages nine and up include The Eyes of
Pharaoh, a mystery in ancient Egypt; The
Well of Sacrifice, a Mayan adventure; The
Genie’s Gift, a middle eastern fantasy; and the Haunted series, about kids
who travel with a ghost hunter TV show, which starts with The Ghost on the Stairs. Her writing craft books include You Can Write for Children: How to Write
Great Stories, Articles, and Books for Kids and Teenagers, and Advanced Plotting.
Learn more at https://chriseboch.com/
or her Amazon page.